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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Romantic Re: Cursed- Prologue

    Here I am...I looked at what your most recent work was and I believe it was this. Let's get to it Shall we? I love how you made the environment ...

    Aug 6, 2014
  • Short Story » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: Buried Alive

    Hi there, This was a good story with a good twist - or should I say: 'touch' - at the end. I only have two remarks though. How in the ...

    Apr 22, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, General Re: Dolly

    Hi there, I have to admit that this is better than most longer short stories I read so far. I don't know if you expect a full review, but there ...

    Apr 22, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, Realistic Re: Can I slice the chicken this time?(WARNING: This story is not nice, it is sick and disturbing)

    Hi there, Firstly I have to apologize, I promised I would review everything in the short story, horror category and look at how far I'm behind already! But hey, I'm ...

    Apr 22, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, Dramatic Re: Infatuation

    Hey there, Bravo. This sure is a good horror story. I like the way you portrait your characters, especially the way you write from the killers' point of view. It ...

    Mar 23, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Action / Adventure Re: The Evil Within (Please review)

    Hey there, before reading I noticed that this short piece is just one piece of text. Especially on this site it's important to space your text out in paragraphs to ...

    Mar 19, 2012
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Those Grey Mondays

    So here I am, Your story is quite solid, short and light even for a subject like this. I like how it just skips from one part to the next. ...

    Mar 16, 2012
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Historical Fiction Re: The Execution

    Hey there, To be honest I wasn't really drawn to the story as much as I would have liked to. There can be a couple of reasons for that: - ...

    Mar 16, 2012
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Bullets

    This is most probably the best short story I've read this week and I have the feeling it'll be the best one I'll read here in a while. I really ...

    Mar 16, 2012
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Mystery / Suspense Re: A Stone for Anita

    Hey there, This sure was an interesting story. I like how you create the mystery, by telling the reader the right things at the right time. Kudos on that. Another ...

    Mar 15, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, General Re: A Borrowed Smile

    Hey I'm working through the short story - horror section of the site and eventually I had to stumble on this one, so here I am. You sure have an ...

    Mar 14, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, Teen Fiction Re: Killer In Seattle

    I agree with Sionarama's review on most parts, though I've got some things to add to that Telling your dog to lick you when a killer is in the street ...

    Mar 14, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, Teen Fiction Re: Red Ribbon

    To be honest I've never heard or read this story before. Re-telling a story is dangerous though. You have to stick with the original ideas of the story while giving ...

    Mar 14, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, General Re: The Zombie Stories (Part 2 of 2)

    Hey again, The ending was good and a promising one too. I mean all the small chapters were not much longer than one stanza and the last one was quite ...

    Mar 14, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, General Re: The Zombie Stories (Part 1 of 2)

    Hey there, You've certainly got a good story going on here. Especially the diary-feeling that you've laid out here is a way of taking a classic horror genre you don't ...

    Mar 14, 2012


More than anything she wanted the world to be uncomplicated, for right and wrong to be as easily divided as the black and white sections of an Oreo. But the world was not a cookie.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Tree of Wishes