Midori

I really liked this piece of writing. It followed the story very well and really made Light seem more human. The only suggestion I have is when you describe Lights ...

This is a good idea for the start of a story. The only syggestion I have is to be more clear about what character is speaking. The entire part with ...

That was truely an amazing story. I liked the way you put the detail of wanting to shake hands with the character at the begining. I was a seemingly an ...