Morrigan

Hey there, Cosmo. Welcome to YWS. This is more of a descriptive piece than it is a short story. I feel like there isn't really a plot to it. If ...

Hey there. Whoa. I got the shivers. I love the imagery. You keep it consistent throughout, but it still manages to have movement. You stay focused on the woman, which ...

Hey there. The ending just blew me out of the water. Awesome, dude. Honestly, I don't really see what the first two stanzas are bringing to the poem. The end ...

Hello, and welcome to YWS. The first suggestion I have is to reformat it. Put it in lines so it's easier to read. The second thing I have to say ...

Hey there. I like it. It's nice. It moves forward, and I like your imagery. And your rhyme scheme isn't bad, either. The one thing I noticed when I was ...

Hello there. Wow. That's... I've been in situations like this before. Very relatable. Quite dark. I was surprised that I liked your rhyme scheme, but I did. It's not too ...

Ahoy there. I really like the snippets of description you put here. You have discovered a way to describe a lot in very few words. I wonder what you could ...

Hey there. Wow. Beautiful. And a wonderful idea to rearrange the words and make them completely different stanzas. I also appreciate how you keep the capitalization of Boy consistent throughout ...

Hello, there. Note: I'm really rubbish at reviewing things other than poetry. I'll do my best, though. And I can't review this whole chapter if I'm going to be thourough ...

Hello there. This was cute and funny. I enjoyed reading it. As you said, though, it could use some tidying up. I don't know if undernourished is the right word ...

Hello! An interesting concept. However, it was very short, and I think it could be made longer and redone. I had to force myself to keep reading through the first ...

Hi there! There are some fascinating images in this piece. I like how there are two images that tie together in the last stanza: an anchor and drowning both have ...

Hello there! Wow. Nice. I really like it. Especially the first and last stanzas. I totally understand the feeling. I like the concept of the other person acting for you. ...

Hello there! First of all, you've chosen to write about a very relatable topic. Nice. I know how you feel. I also like the use of repetition with the lines ...

Hello there, friend. First of all, I really like your meter. It's not sing-songy, like many poems with this kind of rhyme scheme tend to be. Well done. Also, your ...