Mossyra

Thanks, guys! I totally missed that when I typed it up. MelawenWillow--when I said, "The fury burned, as fire made", I meant that his anger burned in the same way ...

This is really good--I especially like the subject matter and the way you explore it. The only two things I can see are that you need more punctuation, and the ...

Okay--you definitely need to go over it again and fix the mechanics, especially punctuation and paragraph breaks; you need more of both. Capitalization, too, needs to be fixed in a ...

This--is--amazing. I love your imagery and description, and the natural flow of your poem. Your word choice is inspired, and your punctuation is perfect, too. Really, the only thing I ...

I liked it! The flow of the poem was very natural, and the subject well-organized and well-displayed. A couple of the phrases you used were very ear-catching, too, like "mad ...