My-mystique-Eyes

This seems like a bad story but it turns out good in the end. I don't know if it is good or not though like writing-wise. So i'd appriciate any ...

wow, that has a lot of potential. It's good. Very nice rythem and a creative mix of words. however there are a few parts that seem a little too original ...

Part I; Leaving Close my eyes...for the last time. I don't want to wake up and find my world wrecked, shattered and strewn with pain, evar again. Blankets of darkness, ...

yeah, shesarabel's right. It's very cool, you did a great job on making ppl feel what you are feeling. Reading it made me feel like my mind was going mad! ...

okay, idk what this is it's just a bunch of random crap that came out of my head 2day. I really can't tell if it's good or not so...critique! Walking ...

wow! This is beautiful! If there was anything To change I would tell you, but...I think it's pretty much perfect. I expecially like the line that says, You reach for ...

Personally I think it's pretty cool, cuz there was a time not so long ago I felt exactly the same and i tried to write a song about it, but ...

Well I'm really really NOT good at critiquing, but I really liked it. I think it was really good and i think it painted a great picture of loving and ...

this is a poem i wrote about 2 ppl who Loved, with hearts that were not whole. And about how, when they came together they did not, COULD NOT make ...

Okay guys, I changed it...A LOT! I don't know if it sucks any less than the first. So I'd love any advice u have. I think all i might have ...