MysticalBlood

The new planet Standing on the top of the hill, I smiled as I stared at the beautiful scene ahead of me. Trees, tall and green, coated in a thick ...

ok lol. i started writing it today... :D that's why it isn't that good... i'll take all your tips and use them. :D thanks!

Ok so this is really good!! So you are wondering how to start a sentence differently? Well, instead of 'but' you can use 'however' 'on the other hand' ... I'm ...

A bit of my sci-fi novel i started earlier. Hope you like and any suggesitons would be helpful!!! Standing on the top of the hill, I smiled as I stared ...

Oh my goodness!!! This is truly brilliant! I love the way you wrote in first person, it made you feel like he really was confused! You've used first person well ...

Thanks and I always have trouble with tenses and ways of phrasing sentences. I'll be sure to fix all that later. Thank you anyway! :D

Hmmm... how about 'The way of shadows'? it's an awesome book, i'm reading it at the moment, it's an assassination fantasy book set (i'm guessing) a few hundred years ago. ...

wow! I absolutely love this! very gripping, i want to read the next part badly! Apart from a few mistakes that have been pointed out, this is brilliant. keep writing ...

This is what i have wrote so far... my mum read a bit of it and i guess there's work that needs doing. but hope you like what i've done ...

it's your own work!!! ;) you should decide! This is very good! really gripping and i don't think there's much bad about it... just wrack your brains and I'm sure ...

thanks lol... i've not actually been with anyone i was just inspired and so i wrote it... actually... paramore inspired. ;) thanks!

This is really good!!! But this bit bugs me- I went in my room, picked up the same book I just had, and pretended to read it, but really I ...

Wow this is absolutely amazing!!! It reminded me a bit of demonata at the beginning... but it's not really that similar when i get into it... i loved it!!! keep ...

thanks for the review...

I meant like demolition sites to build houses and stuff.