Myth

“The Road Not Taken?” asked Bruce as his uncle’s car drove past a road which was labeled so. Bruce’s uncle, Mr. Bancrofti answered, “The road is forbidden, Bruce. It is ...

"Hmm, yeah that’s very interesting." I said, disinterestedly. Since he is being sarcastic here, how about replacing ‘disinterested’ with ‘in irony’? He frowned into the mirror. "Shut up idio

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Mum ignored my question, walked briskly into the sitting room and resumed a spot on the wooden bench, next to ...

I can't add more to what has already been said. With Taro you have him changing personalities, he's protective of his family and then slightly mischevious. I would especially love ...

I love autumn and the picture created from reading this.

Yes, I do, but it would depend on the subject being taught. ~Monessa If you were given a gift by someone you disliked, what would you do?

Off the top of my head, almost any movie that was made from Stephan King was creepy. I hate going to bed after watching one of his movies. After watching ...

Wow, what a way to describe playing a clarinet. :D I certainly didn't think like that whilst I played. I liked the repetition of 'silver buttons' and 'minty hot breath' ...

Climb the apple tree carefully, Grace. Throw out your hand and watch as the envelope flutters to the ground. I see a llama in the next field charging towards you. ...

Grif has good points towards improving your introduction. Vampires are a little cliche for me, but if you were to make them different to normal blood-sucking, night-timers,etc, you could do ...

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I agree with all the above. Posting a short extract doesn't really give a clear picture of what the story is about.

“Ok Grace, I guess I will” he said resignedly and wandered off down an isle, the bowler still atop his head. isle should be aisle The persuers face got even ...

That or I just like doing it and it'd be too much trouble to change my dreams about being an author now. Same with me. I don't want to be ...

It does look useful.. but any idea how I could do this on paint shop pro 7 instead..? I have version 9 and you can use Teeeeo's tutorial though the ...