Myth

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Agon stared across the dark plains of his fathers farm. You need an apostrophe there as the farm belongs to ...

Sam, why didn’t you continue this? The titles from the book are craving to be explained, I especially like How To Cure an Eccentric Coughing Pig Bite ;) I like ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * A bullet through the black night, he was almost undetectable, diving out of the paths of owls and bats that shared the sky. ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review Sometimes they can be right, and are halfway decent people, but mostly they are just moronic jerks . Aren’t ‘morons’ and ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Indigo = Quote Black = Review * Ahoy Sir Trident, seeing no replies I managed to do something that looks like a critique (if ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Reviw * I looked up from the green piece of paper that I had been doodling on into the sarcastic eyes of an unfittingly short ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Hello! This is not historical fiction, it belongs in science fiction. Also, use spacing as this is all a solid ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * The filthy pile of humanity stirred, awakened by the stream of light even now illuminating their prison; their home. Wouldn’t ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Today was Saturday, but Sangha came to work today, anyways . ‘anyways’ = anyway Camilla led Makata to the Viewing ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * On November 17, 9999 young Simon Baxter rode home on the hover bus. In his seat television he watched bioball ...

Green = Comments/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * I woke up in a room, I hope. I don’t know what you wanted to say here, why did you ...

Green = Comment/Correction Black = Review * Once of them was still sprawled there, oozing. ‘once’ = one This was a little... weird. I liked the beginning when the moon ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Lime had grown up in the city all his life. A little awkward at first, I think you meant he ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * Wot cheer, Fish? ;) The bright lights flickered on and off erratically, the harsh glare stinging Cray’s eyes. It had ...

Green = Comment/Correction Blue = Suggestion Black = Review * The night was as it always was, dark and so cold. The fog was thicker than it usually was on ...