NaRachel

Hello :) I love you're title and the last paragraph. What i disliked slightly was The sun is shimmering, peaking out behind the mountain Its just a little cliche, when ...

b-bm b-bm b-bm, is what my heart is doing right now, That last part was sooo intense and i'v e never read anything so shocking on yws. Can i first ...

WOW. I really, really, really liked it. I'm not a poetry technician but i would say you've really got the poetry/imagery thing down pat. Well done, it was really beautiful. ...

First of all, you stole my title for my story. Lol. Nice beginning i believe a story always needs an attention-catching opening. However your verging on introducing too many characters ...

First of all i always love a "Slow, melodic, kind of soft" song. For the first verse: Very nice start( oh star, oh star) Its almost got a dear diary ...

First of all its really sad and brought out real emotion in me so well done for that. I really, really liked it. From the moment i started reading i ...

I agree with Bryr in that it is soft and mournful. Its a pretty poem with a great meaning to it. You seem to be really good at that, putting ...

First of all AWWWWW. Now that I've got that out the way, it has a really great rhythm and it almost sounds like a song. It has a simple but ...

Hey Toto25, First of all it is a gripping title which although verge's on the side of cliche is a great start! Also i would like to say add more ...

Hey i'm not much of an expert on poetry but i think it was great! I especially liked the repetition of "Soldier" Nice storyline. Almost sounded like a song. It ...

First of all this it has a really excellent beginning, very catchy, well done! Then i continued to read it and thought wow! I originally thought that your sentences were ...

Hey i like how the sentences( i call them sentences but you could say lines) are short. I didn't really get the confusement. I love this bit So I may ...

Hey i read/reviewed your last chapter and have to say that once again i am positively impressed (although slightly jealous of your writing technique. It is consistently good. I found ...

Very good and unique. I understand the meaning behind most of it though some bits i'm unsure about. I think some bits sound like they're just being said (more like ...

Hey i think you have a really good writing style that sounds almost professional when you read it. You use just the right amount of big words and small words ...