NightWriter

Yeah this is an incredible piece of work, but as Boogie97 said, the last dialogue is a little vague, so I would change that somehow. From the rest of your ...

A really in-depth piece of work. I was really touched, even though, odds are, it's not real. Still, touching is what is usually aimed for in the creative writing industry, ...

Beautiful! I love the depth of emotion throughout the whole chapter. The length, too, draws me in. I enjoy seeing chapters that are longer than say, 500 words, though those ...

This was good. I've read a few other chapters from Fakebook, and yes, it's really coming together. You've got the storyline down quite well, and your characters are suitably developing. ...

That was sweet. What I liked about it was that it's so heartfelt, so touching and deep. The repitition for the first two paragraphs is a little strange as it ...

I loved this! It's quirky and different! Really nice! As wewinwelose has already picked out, there are a few minor mistakes, but they can be fixed easily. you use a ...

I agree, that was really, really beautiful. Well done! Despite my juvenile age, I recognized something in my great-grandfather right then. He was still a proud man, alive in every ...

Wow. I seriously have you to thank for my Christmas spirit this year, really! This line? "I could open lots of boxes, but I won't find it in a gift. ...

this is why I'm a Christian! But yes: different story: moving on. That was beautiful. Really. Since I've starting reading the poetry pieces on YWS, I've grown to appreciate and ...

Hey sockmonkey! This was nice to read, and as has been previously said, it does have a good plot concept. BUT, there is a couple things you need to watch ...

Hey AlucardXD, This bit (and I'm copying the whole thing, because, frankly, it's phenomenal) here blew me away: Over three-million years ago, seven sister planets were formed from combustive asteroids

Abyss, you amaze me. Everything you write is so poetic and...beautiful! I loved this so much! This bit here: The wind seized to blow, the ghostly whispers disappeared, The trees ...

Where am I to begin my love for you? Is there even an amount of words to use? Four? Sixteen? One hundred? Maybe just two? How is it possible for ...

Hey there! I loved this! My favourite paragraph: this one here, was amazing: She slammed the door behind her hard, and ignored the wood slightly splintering from her force. A ...

Hey again, I really, really enjoyed reading this one. You have a knack for writing it 'like it is'. Cheerful, colourful and blunt. This one piece of dialogue made me ...