NightsDreamer2277

Memories It seemed to be a normal day at the house Sari had grown up in, but Lena could sense tension despite the fact it was only six in the ...

Wow... This is a great begining. The letter style opening isn't something I've often coe across, but you handle it wonderfully. Your style of writing is good, but I wish ...

I'm not going to go into grammer, because that isn't my forte. Your storylines are intriguing to read and I have to say, I'm enjoying them more everytime they come ...

Wow, this is a really well written piece. I would definately like to read on. Your strong sentence struction and writers voice are intriguing, yet don't overpower the story.

You chose an interesting title. Though I don't agree, I did like the way the words flow and the imaging you gave it in your simple verse. This is beautifly ...

I like this poem alot. It gives you the perfect image and reminds us of the days when we've been alone. Good job!

Jake Ruby followed quickly, before rapidly transporting herself and the others to where Luke and Koichi waited with a young man. Stress reflected in everyone's eyes as they bolted for ...

((Up at last)) "Sari, we don't have time," Luke intervened grabbing her shoulder. "We need to hurry." The girl wheeled around, green eyes blazing as she summoned a burst of ...

I like it. It's short and sweet, yet gets your idea across.

((All comments welcome)) Reality There was a brief flash of white light and then the team had arrived. Stalking forward silently, they saw the line of transport trucks coming. Luke's ...

It's an intresting piece... but it's confusing because of the spacing. If you could add a space between your paragraphs it would be alot easier to read. Personally, I think ...

Wow... that was really touching. Having a dad who's former military, I kind of know how these situations go. It was really well written!

((Comments appriciated)) The Mission With a sigh the team complied and listened as the Major ran through the general information. Their mission was to rescue a boy from the labs ...

Late again Kochi opened the door to the girls' room to find them both asleep. With a mischievous grin, the young mutant shook Sarya lightly on the shoulder. She opened ...

Using websites like the above is probably a good bet, but I find I like to take names of friends or make them up. Your character sounds like an Ayame ...