NumberSeven

Heya, I'mma reviewing :) Cons first :( I don't think you need the prologue. You sort of revealed too much by mentioning the serial killer. I think it takes away ...

Hello! I'm reviewing :) Duh. First of all, I think that this story is in the wrong category. It might be better suited for the Romantic Short Stories category 'cause ...

This is an excerpt - not a complete story. It's not supposed to make complete sense, I just want criticism in literary terms, not so much the plot. I'll tell ...

'Ellooo! Cons first! :( Kammal didn’t turn to see his stalker until they were directly behind him. Then he spun around and punched them in the face. If I'm right ...

Haro! Thanks for looking my short story over. Here to review upon request! YAY! Cons foist :( My wedding was a very short seven days away, and there I was, ...

Helloo! Here we go... Cons first :( A few grammar mistakes. Proofread! Errors in spelling break the flow of a story. You start off with an inside look into Tabitha's ...

Helloo! Let's jump right in. Cons first! :( A couple grammar mistakes. They weren't big, so no point in pointing them out, just make sure to proofread so you can ...

Kekeke, yes I'm reviewing. >:3 Okay, Cons! :( Couple grammar and punctuation mistakes. Proofread, woman! You know me and grammar, though, so it isn't a big deal. His foot pressed ...

Hiya! Nice story :) But, Cons first! :( There were occasional grammar mistakes and misused/misplaced punctuation. Proofread and check spelling. Crack! I looked up a beam was in mid air ...

XD Hey N00B. Enjoy your time here :P ALPACA APPROACH. teehee.

Hiya! Thanks for your review on my short story, btw. Now I'm returning the favour! Cons first :( The sun was rising, birds were singing outside, and there were only ...

@Chal He does burn it down, I just don't write about it. There's a reason why he arranged a pile of papers then put his lit cigar on it. Hence ...

Thank you for your reviews, ya'll pointed out things that I missed. ^.^ I appreciate it. Reviews are still welcome :) So, from here on out, the reviews are about ...

Thank you all for the advice ^.^ It was very helpful. I've made a few changes (not that many and, in fact, it's shorter cause I can't go over 1 ...

Hey. Nice story. I agree with the people above about being overdescriptive. Your writing is eloquent, but overdone. However, the vocabulary in particular did not irk me. I caught the ...