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That was brilliant, the enjambment from the second to third stanza was very nicely done, this piece flowed superbly, excellent!

OK, it's just that they cost around 1.2 million pounds which is quite a lot, but I see your point.

"It was a small room, only about fifty square feet of space." - that's not small. Again, brilliant, very captivating.

'Twas good, but a bit too short, expension would be nice. I think "burning" is better than "blasted". Just needs length.

"he cleared his through," - I think you mean "throat". This was brilliant, you continue to amaze. Please can you give some anwers soon, the waiting is killing me.

Lol. Not much there to criticise. The rhythym is nice, no grammar or spelling mistakes. It was very funny.

It should not have an apostrophe: "an imprint their owner’s have left behind." - "have" implies plural, so "owner's" would be "owners'". However, you only mean one "owner". Your phrase ...

Whoa. I just read 1 to 29, non-stop. They flow from one to another just like a book, the character development and style are superb. I cannot wait to read ...

Sounds like a schizophrenic. It was very well put together, the line gaps added to the way in which the thought processes flow. This was completely unique, I don't think ...

The challenge is persent in understanding the connotations and allegories in the book. Any words are easy to "read", I did not phrase that well. Being challenged by a book ...

I agree with Misty and BFG. I especially liked the mpersonal touch at the beginning, it added profundity to the poem. It was brilliant.

lol, make it longer

"And that smile-that Aladdin-esque smile, it was a lie" - change the first dash to a comma or the later comma to a dash, i.e.: "And that smile, that Aladdin-esque ...

Me like, I like the omission of the indefinitive article in the first line. I cannot criticise.

I like this a lot. The rhythm is smooth and the rhyming is tastefully done. The theme is especially good, its very thoughtful. I can't criticise it.