OriginalKommadant

This is pretty good! Like one poster said, Add more detail. Actually...ADD MUCH MORE DETAIL...And maybe explore your characters a little more. I KNOW I KNOW...You didnt post a lot ...

Wow! this is great. You took the typical "Abandoned/outcast farmboy rejected/abandoned by his familY" route but then made the inside filling of this routine story very unique! Like I always ...

By the time I finished the first paragraph, my first thought was "My god...another one of these? But as I continued to read....I started to love it. The main character's ...

*Sigh* Ok, Let me start of with saying that this was, in itself, a good book. One poster compared it to eragon, and well, I hated eragon...But this was actually ...

I enjoy this. I'm glad I was able to read after you had made various improvements, and I can say with confidence that this is Alpha-grade work right here. As ...