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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Nightmare- Take 1

    I actually like this version more. It's beautiful and has just the right amounts of darkness. You did a great job, and it's the perfect length for the themes of ...

    Dec 15, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Nightmare

    Wow. I love the poem, but I think that the repetitiveness is a bit much. I can be cut down just little and still have the same effect. Also, I ...

    Dec 15, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, Romantic Re: Still falling down the Waterfalls

    Oh, this poem is astounding. It's beautiful and amazing. I love the points, the use of symbolism. In truth, we are all afraid of the bottom, and some are even ...

    Dec 15, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Never Go Back

    The first poems tells of freedom and joy. Yet, when reversed, it's saddening. Good job, however, and I think that you did good. Maybe it should be a little longer, ...

    Dec 15, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Narrative Re: Unfair

    There are many things that I love about this poem. One being that it's short and to-the-point. It conveys the message so clearly. Another is how it basically sums up ...

    Dec 15, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My Dreams

    The poem was beautiful. I like the use of the small rhyme with 'lights-flight' but it's not really consistent. I think that maybe a rhyme scheme or a particular beat ...

    Dec 15, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: No Traces

    Beautiful. The poem is mysterious and well-written. Although, 'ballad' was redundant, and even though it was, it didn't subtract from the beauty of it. The poem is enticing and draws ...

    Dec 15, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Ink

    Wow. This poem basically sums up my life. You did a really good job, and I love how the poem just completely circles around. It's well written, and amazing. I ...

    Dec 15, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Am I Writer

    I love this, and I find it so cool! I think I might go check out other palindromes. It's artful and they're really cool to read. It's like, one poem ...

    Dec 15, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, Teen Fiction Re: Finally, Getting Better.

    Quite honestly, this poem is magnificent. I find it completely relate-able and powerful. The stanzas all contribute to the overall message and they tell the story in wonderful chronological order. ...

    Dec 15, 2013


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