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I thought that your descriptions were pretty good and the story works under the guidelines of the prompt. You misspelled quite a few words, though, and had some grammar mistakes. ...

I think that one of the biggest problem younger writers have is beginning and ending a writing piece. I felt that your beginning was pretty solid, but I have a ...

I don't think this is the easiest topic to write about, but I think you did a pretty good job. One suggestion, though. I would leave out the Thank you, ...

I think your descriptions are quite good. I would break it down into more paragraphs, though. The descriptions and lack of paragraphs make it seem very dense. Also, noticed a ...

Hey, I thought the story was quite good overall. There are some things I noticed that i would fix, though. In Finally it was the week of the play. I ...

I like your writing style, but I think your particular style would benefit from the use of dashes. For example, in The light was so bright, even filtered through the ...

By the other side, the Fallen Angel granted the king an empty book, he claimed that whoever who writes on it; thoughts, time and death itself would move to fulfil ...