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Re: Hands Like Birds
I really like this story. The overall flow is very good, and I like the titular metaphor you chose. It adds to the nervousness that is a key trait of ...
May 29, 2012 -
Re: The BabySitter
The story itself was written very well, but I have a few key points. One, as Sky said, the grammar and syntax is a little off in some points. The ...
May 29, 2012 -
Re: What one will do for love
You have a strong plot line going, but it's a bit hard to follow. I think the beginning starts far too in media res. It reads a bit like a ...
May 29, 2012