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  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Supernatural Re: The Last Seasons (Chapter 5, first 2 sections)

    I am very surprised that no one reviewed your beautiful work.I didn't see even one grammar,English, or spelling error so I see that you have thoroughly edited this on your ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: Second Always Comes Last: Symbols

    this phrase: "all of them, too quite to hear beneath the ruckus." You need to change quite to quiet. 2.Remember to put a question mark at the end of the ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Horror Re: Second Always Comes Last: Well

    this sentence: "Shane shrugged then nodded, slunking his shoulders backward." Slunking is not a real word. Please use slinking instead. 2.You need a possessive noun in this sentence that you ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: Second Always Comes Last: Red-Like-Carmine

    this sentence: "I yelled out suddenly, sending the whole group flinching. I had had another pressing headache all day and my patience was non existent." The last word nonexistent is ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: Werething - Chapter 10

    1. I like all writers this very important rule, don't use slang in your writing. In this sentence: “I’m gonna say I agree with Everette,” Cole decided." You can't use ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The Veil - Chapter 22

    1. In the sentence: "but Rufolu was even more quick tempered" instead of writing even more quick just simply put down quicker. 2. In this sentence: "He smiled. “Guardsman, may ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Wool of the Prince-- Chapter 37

    1. I know that this may sound confusing but in this sentence, "“I see him. I wonder why he’s not greeting us?” you have to remove the question mark. The ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Narrative, Teen Fiction Re: Strawberry Hearts -7-

    1. In the phrase: "You see, I think about you and I a lot, Evie. " The you and I has to be you and me.Please fix that. 2. Two ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Forestlore Ch. 4: Histories

    1. In this sentence : "They possessed no conjuring or spellgift." Spell gift are two separate words. Please fix this. 2. I know the plot line of your story and ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Fantasy Re: Little Sister Chapter 7

    1.You forgot to this this in a lot of your paragraphs but you need to do doesn't and don't and shouldn't and wouldn't with an apostrophe. 2.You need to indent ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, General Re: Dual Identity - Prologue

    1. I don't believe that mittened is a real word. No fake words in pro writing. 2.Remember to always have a space between the period and the first capitalized word ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Historical Fiction Re: Flora Dennis and the Island of Two Eyes - Chapter One

    1.Remember to always capitalize the first word inside the quotation marks. this sentence: "Where is your uncle,Flora?" she asked. Capitalize she. 3. In this sentence: " Some time later, the ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Typo Alley~G Part Two

    Here is my review: 1. I tell this to all writers. Don't use the word stupid in your writing. You used it at the beginning of the story when you ...

    Dec 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Other, Action / Adventure Re: The Run In at Shady Ridge

    I think your story needs a good finish after this chapter.I want to know what happened.Now for the grammar. I repeat this to a lot of writers. You need to ...

    Dec 18, 2014
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Speak

    I think that you should change a couple of things. First, this has to be organized in paragraphs or no one will like to look at it visually. This looks ...

    Dec 17, 2014


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