Prosithion

It was good, but there were a few wording errors. I'd have to agree with Dream Deep. Pretty good job. This story could really be something. :)

I would really appreciate comments and suggestions. The Hunt The Mountains of Vermont glistened like the paint of an artist’s brush, gone wild. Most would have found it pretty, but ...

That was a awesome story. I've got absolutely no comments.you should get that published in a magazine. :D