Prosithion

Interesting, but it isn't a poem. Other than changing the format, I think that this is a good poem, although I think it could have been a little longer.

It was very good, but around the middle it seemed to lose some of its rhythm. Fix that and I think that this is a wonderful poem.

Scene 2: Upon arriving at his house, Albrecht stopped at his mailbox before turning into his driveway. There were two letters in the box, along with a magazine. Albrecht pulled ...

Actually, this was it I never thought about changing it, or adding on to it

It was sort of short, but I liked it. If I were you, I'd add on to this poem and expound on uit, because from what I read, it was ...

It was a nice poem, but the stanzas and lines were LLLOOOOONNNNNGGGGGG!!!!!!!! Try shortening them down a little. I think that it will make the poem flow better, but regardless, ...

I really liked it. The only complaint that I have is that the beat seemed a little clumsy. Even without a coherent rhyme scheme, I found the poem intriguing and ...

Merci, both of you. Imp, This is my novella, so there will be much more, so you might get a batter feel of the story once I post more. In ...

maybe, I'm not sure. It was a school assignment, so I'll think about it. Thanks

I'm going to edit it. I'd changed it, but had never got a chance to post the changes.

I have a friend who is like that. He isn't dead yet. I'll edit it for ya.

Thank you for the marvelous crit!

Here's my crit for Chapter 2: He stared around the courtyard in a "this is it?" kind of way change "in a" to "with a"; change "kind of way" to ...

I LOVED IT!!!!! There were a few grammatical errors, but I can overlook that because this story was absolutely wonderful. POST ANOTHER ONE! It is smashing!

It was a school assignment. There was no point, but I thank you for the crit anyway.