Raelyn

Thanks for this review. I will make those changes:)

Wow, I did not mean to send that 3 times!

hahahahah, yeah I am better just waiting to be cleared....

hahahahah, yeah I am better just waiting to be cleared....

hahahahah, yeah I am better just waiting to be cleared....

sry... my slide show is on my wall somewhere

YES EMERSON IS MY FAV TOO>>>> Oh um you should see my slide show;) It has refrence photos of all the places I imgined them to be and characters:)

MASTERING UGHHHHHHHH It is the auto correct of Asterin my main character

Thank you so much the second ch. is posted to just so ya know;). Oh and the whole point is Asterin is perfect from what the eye can see... Just ...

Thank you very much:)

Thank you Honora like you say if I cant take criticising what am I doing on here. This was al very helpful. Just an FYI this is meant to be ...

Thank you:)

Thank you very much I am a terrible editor! I'll keep working hard at it!

Thanks for the review! I didn't like poetry until I wroute these to poems:)

Thanks Pal!!