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Raelyn723

Raelyn723

  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Supernatural Re: A random chapter(PLEASE review)

    Wow. This was really, really good. The way you described everything was perfect and, despite me and my aversion to swearing, I think you used the words at the right ...

    Aug 9, 2012
  • Poetry » Health, Humor Re: Laugh-Lines

    I really liked this!! Not much of a poetry person, but this was interesting and I could really relate to it. Your simile with the forehead like the crinkled notebook ...

    Aug 9, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, Lyrical Re: Listen

    I am definitely not a poetry expert or anything but this is a really great poem. I loved the rhyming in it and the way it flowed. Normally it bugs ...

    Jul 7, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Teen Fiction Re: For her (Chapter two)

    This is great, just like the first chapter! I have to point out that you kept calling Abott by different names, which was really confusing. You called him Alistar and ...

    Jul 2, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Romantic Re: For her

    This. Is. Amazing. I was hooked the whole way through. I loved the way you described Briar without being too overwhelming on the details, and I loved how you created ...

    Jul 1, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Balance [Excerpt]

    Wow. This is really good. Since it is an excerpt I won't overly explain this, but I wish we had a little more description of what she means when she ...

    Jun 27, 2012
  • Short Story » Horror, Dramatic Re: Seconds Gone By-Prologue

    This is intriguing. I really liked the beginning and how it makes the reader on the edge of their seat before you even bring in the character. I also really ...

    Jun 16, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: Soldier Boy: Chapter One

    Wow. This is outstanding! I love the way you explained how he came to be in the army and how you didn't really go into details about what happened there. ...

    Jun 16, 2012
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic Re: The Lone Magpie

    This is a really well-written story. I loved the little hints of suspense when you had to wait to find out what they were doing in the hospital. I also ...

    Jun 14, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Teen Fiction Re: The Boy with Blue Eyes

    I like this story a lot, but honestly, it's a little confusing. You left out commas in a lot of places that they needed to be, so it took away ...

    Jun 13, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, Health Re: How do you know?

    Wow. This is really amazing. It's really relatable and I can feel exactly what your talking about! I really like the way you kept the beginning of each stanza the ...

    Jun 12, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The breakdown

    I really really liked this poem! You have a lot of strong emotions in it and it stands out from the other ones I have read from other people. I ...

    Jun 12, 2012


It's been many years since I had such an exemplary vegetable.
— Mr Collins, Pride and Prejudice