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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Luna 3.2

    Hey there. :) Did ignored her Shouldn’t that be Dad? We all know that you were and always will be jealous of Jordin.” Seems a little bit weird. Maybe it ...

    Apr 19, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Can You See Me? (Chapter Four)

    Hey there mate, here on request. :) First off, this is a nice chapter. For the most part you have good spelling and grammar. However, there were something that need ...

    Apr 19, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: A Criminal's Heart- Chapter 4 (part I)

    Sorry, I don't have enough time to go through the whole thing and point out the mistakes. I'll jsut give a shorter version. FIrst off, I loved the side moment ...

    Apr 18, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Diamond Fire: Chapter One

    Again, excellent work. I didn't see any mistakes in this chapter per say... However, you seem to have a problem with tenses. When you do a paragraph describing places and ...

    Apr 15, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Prologue: Diamond Fire (Revived)

    Here on request. Sorry I am so late. :) After reading it through, I must say this ones pretty clean. I didn't catch many flaws, which is really good. And ...

    Apr 15, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: A Criminal's Heart Chapter-3

    Here I am, as you requested. :) Me? Investigating a high profile case? I couldn’t believe my ears as the caller on the other end informed me of Amanda Bailey’s ...

    Apr 13, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: A Criminal's Heart- Chapter 2

    HEy there, here on request. :) I'm to do things a little differently here. “Eureka! I have found it at last,” I roared with excitement , waking up my wife, ...

    Apr 13, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Can You See Me? (Chapter Two ~ Part two)

    Hey there, here on request. ;) First things first, boring sentence structure. Most of the time we see one statement and then another statement. There were many instances were you ...

    Apr 12, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Crafting the Amulet (Chapters 1-3)

    Howdy there, here’s that review you requested. ;) (sorry, I would have had this earlier but I've been traveling recently.) I don’t have much to say, as this story is ...

    Apr 12, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: A Criminal's Heart - Ch-1(Olivia)

    Hey there, here on request. :) Ima have to say this right now, I liked this much better than the prologue (though that's normally the case). But really, the murder ...

    Apr 11, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: A Criminal's Heart-Prologue (REVISED)

    Here on request. This seems familiar. I've actually read this before. :) She twisted her Korth revolver menacingly. But I still couldn't believe that she was going to do that. ...

    Apr 10, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Blinded prt1

    I like the direction you are taking with this, the beginning three paragraphs were a bit dull (though of course the setting must be introduced at somepoint.) It really started ...

    Mar 13, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Love in the rain

    Pretty cool story. I liked how you started out with the difficulty sleeping, (which had an effect on her mannerisms in the rest of the story (and causes suspicion as ...

    Mar 13, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Stay With Me

    Pretty good story, I like it. The beginning was a tad heart breaking, which is what you were going for, no? And in the end they end up getting back ...

    Mar 13, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Apocalypse-(Horror Zombie Story)

    My first impression was wow. I really liked how you started this story with a bang by killing the main character's mother. And I must say, what a gruesome way ...

    Mar 13, 2010


If you don't know it's impossible it's easier to do. And because nobody's done it before, they haven't made up rules to stop anyone doing that again, yet.
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