Renard

This piece makes a really good point about the dangers of smoking. In a very dramatic way. XD 'and inhale fresh air before continuing...' I must comment on the fact ...

The title drew me to this piece. Also, in the description you said you are feeling alone like all that time. And that's sad. I want you to know you're ...

Even though this piece ends with a rhetorical question, it's a little bit miserable. 'Should I even try?' The title was pretty bleak, but that was strangely what drew me ...

I have to be picky: YOU SPELT PROLOGUE WRONG! XDDDDDDDDDD Now for the work: After reading, I can't decide whether your protagonist is male or female? And there is no ...

I feel like the punctuation and grammar is a bit sketchy in this piece. I wouldn't normally mention this first, but it detracts from the overall content, because I keep ...

Clearly this piece has come from the persona of a deranged mind. However, I feel like there are some irrelevant details included, or rather, ideas that don't really make much ...

I'm not exactly sure who the characters are in this piece. But does it matter? NOT AT ALL! I think your characterisation of them through name choices and action description ...

This is a really pretty poem. It's full hope and I want to say light. Lines like this: 'I'm going to the planet with the orange sky To the planet ...

I think the formatting of this piece is absolutely amazing! The way in which you convey your ideas in this piece are spectacular. My favourite line: 'She would adapt. That ...

The premise behind this story is good. I like the introduction at the beginning, although didn't give too much away in explanation. :) I feel there should be some punctuation ...

Ok, so this work really documents the grieving process accurately. It's very impressive. You begin by acknowledging the refusal stage: 'I'm too stubborn to accept that you're gone.' My favourite ...

Firstly: the names you have chosen for your characters: Sirena and Francois etc. are absolutely perfect. :) Good choices. I love that there is humour in the piece and it ...

You must really hate Christmas! Lulz. I have no idea what possessed you to write this, but it is strangely quite humorous, and to say I can relate would be ...

Ok. Typo: 'wit rage' Unless you're going gangsta, I think that was with. Now, I have put the criticism first, because it is the ONLY thing I want to pick ...

First of all, I'm not exactly sure why the whole thing is in italics? It is a little bit annoying to read in this way. Your opening quote: 'Isn't it ...