Riedawriter23

Hello, welcome to YWS! :) Firstly, I'd just like to inform you of the rules and guidlines. (at the top of the screen under "About". Please try to keep your ...

Ooo I really like this! Very creative. I couldn't draw a hand if my life depended on it and here you have so many. 0.0 Great job. :)

Hello! :) Okay, I think that you used a lot of descritption, and good job as far as imagery is concerned, but some of your sentences are just far too ...

I like this. It's so...sarcastic and humorous and yet serious. I think that you could have added a little more of yourself in this though. The message seems like it ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! :) OKay, in the beginning, the grammar mistakes really got to me. It wasn't that it was bad the way that you said just confused ...

I also agree with what was said before. Not only do you have a lot of grammar errors and the story is far too dependent of dialogue, but the story ...

Okay, the thing with this poem is, you have a great base, but your rhyme scheme is off in a lot of stanzas and you repeat "This is the child" ...

I like this. I think that you had a good idea going for you, but this can be extended. Your rhyme scheme was very nice, so I think that if ...

I like the sound of it, it's very mysterious. The only thing is that you repeat yourself a lot, and even though it's most likely meant to sound very lyrical, ...

It can't be right For me to cry When I think of you Because you're the perfect guy. **I like the first three lines here, but the last one seems ...

This felt so very unused and it looked sad and lonely so I have a nomination. :) Metaphor. The pouring metaphor was interesting, but it's butter spread over too much ...

Rick and Linds! :) ...I misses them! *cries*

I don't think I can take another lie. I'm filled to the brim and Spilling. Over. Over you and over eyes, and over falls I'm over lies. You've poured me, ...

Sniper: Lol, easy! I just write something in the little box at the bottom and post it! :P Lyrical_Sunshine: Ooo, I like that. "Romantically entangled". Very pretty. :) I'm not ...

haha, it's in the process of publication but as always that takes such a long time it's unbearable :P. I'll see if I'm allowed to post the first one...I'd love ...