Riedawriter23

Well. It's not like I haven't read something like this before. Note in poetry form but...So, I'm going to be completely honest and said I liked it. :) It was ...

The way the lines are set really works for me. It gives the poem a really serious tone and makes it simple yet meaningful so I'll say that it doesn't ...

I agree with Clau. Showing the events of the poem could do a lot for it. It was altogether interesting and actually "witnessing" the event would be really great. I ...

Good point to get across. The rhyming is a little off in some places but it doesn't really matter depending on how the song is actually sung. Good job on ...

I liked it. The rhyming was great, and of course I can't help but to encourage: Smacking lips, cracking hips **That's my favorite part, of course. It gives the poem ...

Lol, this was really good. I liked how he said that even if he was gay she would make him straight again. It was a very nice introduction of the ...

Wow, he died like really good! Really realistic, Vernon. I was holding my own throat just reading it. Thank God he died. I agree... and or speak for everyone when ...

Wow! I like it a lot! I didn't expect Jared to come home. I did at first but then I was like, no, they're going to escape this time. Big ...

Wow this is really good, Dono. From the beginning to the end I'm totally interested. You've made a great character out and the background was done very well. I already ...

oh....my....This one made me cry Brad. At first I was crying when Kyle and Jon kissed and then again when they were talking to each other and now...well I don't ...

I'm really confused but it's a good confused!!! I'm guessing this is all the Opal in Jon's eye taking affect? ...if I'm wrong then I'm with Clau, Ariel is very ...

*gasp* she wouldn't...She's going to risk her life so that Jon can have Kyle? Awwwww, *hugs Sarah* Okay, after all of this, I do like Sarah, She's overall a nice ...

:( I can't believe Ariel was going to make Jon kill himself. Pull the trigger? She's freaking crazy, man, like seriously. But I do think that Jon can get through ...

Awww. Is this why Kyle is so Kyle? You'd said that the last flashback would tell why...now I actually understand. Maybe he's afraid to love someone, I mean he always ...

I disagree Clau. If it's Kyle/Jon intercourse then it's okay, lol jk. I would have never guessed that the presence would come in. I seriously thought that Sarah might be ...