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Fell into the ocean, into the dark I see black-hearted angels swim with me taking me deeper into my bottomless sea all my past and futures were with me all ...

I admire my bed for all its warmth and comfy-ness during my starlight voyages. We would sail across my river of memories and find all sorts of nightmares trying to ...

Some punctuation errors, but other than that, good. Great imagery by the way. Keep it up!

Punc.tuation. Work on. That. Other than that. It's has detail. and some good wording. Keep. It up.

1. Quote of the week has been the same one for at least a month. 2. There are a lot of emo girls in Dramatic Poetry. 3. Why is Bartemius ...

Details, details, details. It's mundane and felt like you've rushed this. Had me laughing at the end though, very nice.

Um, elaborate. Right now, it's x , an abstract variable. Make it tangible. Please. You've got something good here.

I didn't really think I was going for a story - just a moment in time, like a haiku. But in flash fiction. And sorry for the grammar mistakes, I ...

9:21. Two minutes separate the hallway from the threat of blooming to a jungle of hormone-infested creatures. Everyone, except one, is tense, diligently watching the red menace of the clock. ...

I remember sailing across the oceans, finding myself lost and drowning until your hands picked me up and became my guide, my sanctuary. I happily sailed through your tub of ...

The Moon hides when it is clouded by the smoke of dying fire and the death of a new beginning. Stars have heard our voices and weep rain with us, ...

Is this for Jake or for me? Because it's not really a compelling read if the poem's for one person. You even said it yourself, it's for Jake and not ...

Sorry, it's just hard for me to put things in perspective of the reader. I'm too lazy to try, I guess. But I added a stanza just to explain who ...

Made some capitalizations. Anymore than that, I'd be redefining a flashing arrow. :\

Well that's what people criticized me for - my vagueness. I thought wrapping it up would make people happy. Please make up your minds o.0