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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Boots on the Ground

    Okay, I love me some war fiction, so I'll critique this! Red is for corrections/suggestions! The serene rigidity and straight edged silhouette of peaceful orderly life had been twisted into ...

    Aug 8, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Room Is Burning

    The only thing I want to mention grammatically is that "it's" means "it is" and "its" is possessive, as in "it owns the car". Just watch that usage. I liked ...

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Fallen Down

    Hey there TheThing . I'm your friendly neighbourhood reviewer for today. I'm going to post my general comments in blue at the end, my grammatical comments in red throughout the ...

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Internet Activism and Arab Revolution

    Hey there :) When writing an article, it's always important to ensure you don't assume the reader knows too much about the subject. For instance, I don't know what self-immolated ...

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Nightmare

    This is really disjointed and incoherent, and I had trouble understand exactly what was happening. This is mainly because of the way you didn't explain much and swapped tenses quite ...

    Oct 15, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Code - Prologue: And He Pulled the Trigger...

    I like the idea's you present in this, but it's just too vague to give a critique on. Please PM me if you write more because it is certainly intriguing. ...

    Oct 15, 2010
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Sepia To Darkness (Part 1 of zombie story)

    Hey there Aspiring! I'm going to review this for two reasons; A) I love zombie fiction and anything Zed Head related. You should read World War Z and The Zombie ...

    Jun 28, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Operation Frostbite: Death at Sea

    It has been ages since I critiqued anything, so here goes. RED will be my corrections/suggestions Monday, November 27th, 2006 09:00 Hours Trans-Alaska Pipeline, Remote Alaska There’s this huge pipel

    Jun 14, 2010
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: "Glee" fanfic - "Material Girl"

    I have to see, I'm not a massive fan of Glee, but that was great. You portrayed Kirk really well and I can see your writing going places! I was ...

    Jan 29, 2010
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Holiday to a Hellish Place

    okay, i'm not big on critique-ing but i'll give it my best shot. red font is my observations/corrections/suggestions Finally, the volcanic planet came into view. “There she is, Ted.” I ...

    Jan 29, 2010


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