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  • Poetry » Lyrical, Spiritual Re: Deleted 51

    Hi lumister. I was looking for something to review, and I had this open, so I figured, why not? The title was what originally attracted me to this piece. I ...

    Nov 26, 2014
  • Lyrics » Humor, Fanfiction Re: Imagine - The Health Food Edition

    Hello! Here to save you from the green room~ So I really like this concept, and I like the song you based it off of. Just the idea of eating ...

    Nov 24, 2014
  • Lyrics » Other, General Re: A Moment With You

    Heya Timmy! Because you requested a review, I'mma be tough. ^-^ I should let you know that I review lyrics basically like I would a poem, I’m just a little ...

    Nov 12, 2014
  • Poetry » Politics, General Re: At Temple's Fall

    Hello dd! I'm here as promised. I'm going to give you straightforward criticism, because you thought you needed some. :) Let's go stanza by stanza. Stanza one! A temple of ...

    Nov 2, 2014
  • Poetry » Spiritual, General Re: The Help of My Countenance

    Hello! Very nice spiritual poem here. I like that you based it on a specific scripture. Just a couple things that could be fixed a bit: And protect you with ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Realistic Re: Miracle

    Okay so I'm back, after pondering. I think I liked this poem. Sometimes it's so hard to tell. I like what you did with the sometimes/rarely/always kind of thing. It ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: untitled

    Hello! (I'm going to apologize right upfront for any disconnectedness in this review because the TV's on and distracting me) So I really liked the imagery of this. I could ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Other, Other Re: Grim Limericks

    Hello~ So this was interesting.... So I think one main thing that you need to know about here is the form for limericks. You didn't follow the layout which is: ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Demon

    Hello! Wow, I was not expecting that last line. What a kicker! It really changed the whole poem. I love surprises like that. So, I enjoyed this, but there are ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Literature, General Re: A Conceit

    Hello! Anything can count as poetry. :) I like the sentiments in this, about a girl relating to pictures on the wall. I think the largest problem with this is ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Humor, Humor Re: The shortest halloween poem ever

    Hello~ So yes, this was very short, but I'm not sure where the creativity was, sorry. This is a phrase everyone knows. I think one of the points of poetry ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Beast of Beauty

    Hello! I thought this was a rather interesting poem. I liked the words you used: they were very descriptive and packed with imagery. I liked the story you told, how ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Narrative Re: Morning Breeze

    Hello! So this was a peaceful poem, and I like the images that you use! However, I think that your rhyme is holding this poem back from being great. Almost ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Horror, Teen Fiction Re: Ashes to Ashes

    Hello~ I like how halloweeny this was. It reminds me of a witch’s chant/curse. There were some problems with it, however. Let’s do little nitpicks first. ashes to ashes So, ...

    Oct 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Other Re: kaleidoscopic whirls

    Hello! You really do have a knack for word choice. All of your words are delicious 10 point words packed with imagery and connotation. Sadly, there's so much of that ...

    Oct 23, 2014


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