Ross

I'm laughing. The beginning, ending and middle were fantastic. There were some sentences that could be modified or taken out, but otherwise it was a good story.

This seems to be a bit cliche to me. The girls find this haunted house and woo, woo! But I like how you made the dialogue and everything, but I ...

So fantastic in spite of all the grammar/spelling mistakes. I love how you gave the narrator thoughts as she was in the story. That makes her seem real. Very good. ...

I like this story! :) I would have liked to see more thought in the narrator's eyes and have more showing, not telling. But I like the idea of it! ...

I just registered to YWS so I'm pretty darn excited. Lemme tell a bit about myself. I'm 14 going on 15 and I'm hard-of-hearing. I'm very motivated about writing and ...