Rydia

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Ooooh, good idea. Name= Marianne Saunders Nickname= Anne Age= 22 Gender= Female Location= London, England Appearance= Tall with long, dark brown hair and dark green eyes. Ability= She can bring ...

Mishca Monster, I thought as I watched the destruction of the two mechs and their passengers. I wanted to turn away and allow the tears to course down my face ...

I like this in general but I think the boots need quite a bit more work and I agree that it's very dark so there isn't really a lot of ...

1. The angle of the box is great and I love the texture and the black and white hue. It's very good and the ring stands out perfectly. 2. This ...

1. The first isn't showing up on my computer. 2. It's a little out of focus but the kid's posture is great and I really like how full and colourful ...

This is pretty good. I think the hips are too wide and the part of the belt that's drooping down should be angled to the side more and probably quite ...

Hey there, welcome to YWS! Why not tell us a little about you? Are you interested in sport at all or music? What genres do you like to read or ...

Hello there Ayra! As usual, your description is beautiful but I think you need to slow it down a bit. Your character closes her eyes for a moment and then ...

Hello again! I think I'll look at the two chapters separately to give myself some order so logically, let's begin with chapter one. I think your fantasy world needs work. ...

Hey there! I think separating this into different points of view was a good idea but you don't tell much of a story through it. Now if each of the ...

Crysi - You have such beautiful eyes! And the dress looks lovely on you. Loose - Awwww, you're such a cute little kid! Lookie what I got for Christmas - ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! You might want to have a word or two with Jasmine Hart if you see her around, she's very good at sonnets and very ...

Hey there and welcome to the site! It's lovely to meet you. If you have questions or would like a critique then feel free to pm me, Heather xx p.s. ...

I think this is good but a little confusing. Maybe you could move the flash back of the text message and the journey and everything to the beginning? Because I ...