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Okay, so. This episode was very deftly put together--all of these little nothing subplots came together and it was beyond amazing. The one person I had a problem with, though, ...

Hey again, JFW. :wink: Another completely fabulous chapter. I really do love this story--it's one of my favorites in recent memory. I'm excited to see how everything comes together. HIGH ...

Gah, Serena, you have no idea how much you rock. XD Somehow, you managed to do a pathos-filled story about dying children and lots of weeping without making it sappy...? ...

Hey, JFW. ^_^ *glee* This was such an incredible story. I really love the small details that you used--the "hum" of the receptionist's computer really struck me. I loved how ...

Hey, Medusa! Welcome to YWS. ^_^ I really enjoyed your take on things in this poem--you definitely have a unique perspective and a unique voice, and I look forward to ...

Tillychan! You know I would make sandwiches for your characters any day, so I shan't gush too much in that regard. However, there was one line that bugged me especially: ...

Ah! Yes! *high fives* You're getting much better at keeping a joke incorporated longer, rather than a bunch of one-liners. It's absolutely fabulous. One thing you might want to watch: ...

Hey, God! I've not seen you around before, so. *tips hat* I'm going to treat this poem as a starting point. Why? It's short, sweet, and isn't worth improving--so instead, ...

Hey, zoey! I've been wanting to sit down and read this for ages. ^_^ Ishmael seems like a really cute character; I'm excited to see where you go with him. ...

Hey, JustMe! *high fives* Welcome to YWS! Definite kudos for trying out poetry; it's definitely not the easiest thing to start with. I think my main problem with this poem ...

Hey, Snoinkus! Thought while I was on a poetry-critiquing kick, I'd stop by. I really do enjoy this poem. You took imagery from music/ballet, which people have done before, and ...

Hey, babyboymilky! Welcome to YWS. ^_^ Make sure you do as Saint said and make some reviews--it's a bit daunting at first, but you'll find that they really help you ...

Hey, revolver! Welcome to YWS. ^_^ One of your major goals as a beginning poet is developing your own style. This is a rather daunting task at first, mainly because ...

Hey, OverEasy! I've been wanting to look at some of your work for awhile; I've finally gotten the chance. This was a really sad story for me to read--dealing with ...

I second that. The one thing that bugged me a little was the vulgarity, and I'll tell you why--Mrs. Crochet is okay, because that has the potential to be really ...