Sasha

Very interesting. I enjoyed this. I demanded at the police officer. I demanded would sound so much better. The News channel, how ironic. Hehehehehehe. I like that line. tempted to ...

Hello. I'm not very sure on how poems are supposed to be punctuated and stuff so I will leave that for another reviewer. My comments will be in bold . ...

Hello! It has got beautiful beaches with lovely palms. This sentence would sound a whole lot better if you said: It has beautiful beaches with lovely palms. It flows better. ...

Hello. This seems like it will be very interesting, but I think you need a better hook. Your opening paragraph didn't draw me in very well. Your descriptions are lovely ...

I agree that all girls can relate to this in someway. I think that you should explain why she's crying in the beginning. It didn't make a lot of sense ...

Awww so cute! At first, I thought this was going to be like any other depressing break-up story, but once I read the first paragraph, I knew it wasn't going ...

Hello! You've done a very good job so far. Autumn was giving way to winter, but that was not the only reason I was feeling so cold. I love love ...