ScarletMornings

woo hoo for my fellow okie! i really, really, strongly dislike rhyming poems, but your diction and vocab in this were great. very nice imagery. everything i would complain about ...

i'm personally not so hot on rhyming poems (got away from those long ago) but i think you did a pretty good job with this. i agree with xanthan gum. ...

i especially love thes lines- I hear your movements slightly as you edge closer to the window, mistaking every breeze for his footsteps. Instead, you fell, and you fell small ...

i personally really enjoyed this. it was short without being abrupt to me, but it was still short enough to be slightly mysterious, and i loved the image it created ...