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Re: Land of Sky, Land of Rain (Chapter Fourteen)
Zankoku!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D There were just a couple of things I noticed: After... after enduring torture for three years, returning to her home and family only to find out that a
Jun 11, 2008 -
Re: Emerald Heart
Please space between paragraphs. Then I will crit. :D
May 19, 2008 -
Re: Are you going to eat me?
Hey, thanks. Sorry, I modified that bit; it was supposed to be a thought bubble. Hm. description of him earlier on? How do you mean? At this point in the ...
May 2, 2008 -
Re: Are you going to eat me?
I know this needs a lot of work. The problem is, I can't see what to do with it. Possibly more description. The question "Are you going to eat me?" ...
May 2, 2008 -
Re: Chapter 1
Sorry for not replying sooner... :D Okay. Getting in my car felt like I was going to die or be reborn at that moment. Goes with the... I understand what ...
May 2, 2008 -
Re: My Prologue
Well, I would crit, but it seems that everyone has critted this piece of yours. o.O :D That's okay. I did crit your second piece, just letting you know. ;) ...
Apr 25, 2008 -
Re: Chapter 1
:D Hm. It's interesting, but a little confusing. “Cassius! Don‘t scare me like that!” I said to Cassius. “I got to go” I said giving him a kiss on his ...
Apr 25, 2008 -
Re: The Eclipse Chronicles 0
Please space between your paragraphs. Then I will crit. :D
Apr 16, 2008 -
Re: Unloved- Chapter 1 Savior (edited)
:D It's still good, just a little work. :) Sorry, I was in a bit of a rush towards the end there. :)
Apr 13, 2008 -
Re: Unloved- Chapter 1 Savior (edited)
:) The ally ways became enshrouded in shadows, as the sun peaked its way over the distant horizon. I jogged to my house, soon ending my early morning run. This ...
Apr 13, 2008 -
Re: Why I'm considered a psycho... (Chapter one)
XD I like it. There are just a few things that stand out. :) *** Anyway, I went to the front door or should I say gate? There was a ...
Mar 3, 2008 -
Re: Abyss of Dawn--Chapter One
Okay... sorry got a little lost about where you were. :D *** King Orlin rode his horse quickly through the Pass of Shades in the Moore Mountains *** This is ...
Mar 3, 2008 -
Re: Abyss of Dawn--Chapter One
I will crit this tomorrow. :D:D:D
Mar 2, 2008 -
Re: Land of Sky, Land of Rain (Chapter Eleven)
Well... you are postponing The rescue of Koreth.... from what I gather. Did they just give up hope on him?? Or is he going to magically pop up later and ...
Mar 1, 2008 -
Re: Land of Sky, Land of Rain (Chapter Ten)
Don't worry Saint. I'm worse than you XDXDXDXD Again, cut to the chase!!!!!!! Her beloved Koreth is dying!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I don't want to hear this constant bickering, because..... KORETH!!!!!!!!!!!! :D
Mar 1, 2008