SeraphTree

Sorry for posting twice. My computer is incredibly slow and stupid. Oh, and Dude, I'm sorry about giving some of that advice *sheepish grin* I totally thought I was in ...

Thanks for the advice you guys- OO" Um, okay dancy. I'll hop to it and revise it as soon as possible. Thanks every body :D

What I would suggest, Zaw, is to describe the setting a little more. Also, when does this all happen? Is it the same day, or is it over the course ...

I like this part AWWW anyway..... Since it's from Katie's point of view, maybe you should show more emotion or thoughts towards the end. Just an idea ;D

I really liked the twist at the end, and the way you kept me guessing until then.