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Re: Sunbathing
I agree with SlickJimmy, it's a bit confusing. I think playing with the line breaks and experimenting with this could make it a better poem. not all the lines have ...
Oct 9, 2006 -
Re: Throwaway Lines
I hate how you talk like a computer in your posts that aren't poetry. Like, relax. I think you lose rhythm in the third stanza, look out.
Oct 9, 2006 -
Re: Split Personalites.
To the first person, I think that you're taking the poem too seriously. To the second person, thanks for the reply, it was inpsired by this person that I know, ...
Oct 9, 2006 -
Re: Split Personalites.
The world must be different, for those who can do the splits. Spread their legs around the world. In Tokyo, I see a foot. In Canada, I see an eye. ...
Oct 8, 2006 -
Re: play melancholy
It was really good. I liked the words in the brackets, they flowed nicely. the only thing that, seemed kind-of-not-up-to-par was 'playing old records', it seemed kind of cliched. Although, ...
Oct 8, 2006 -
Re: The House that Jack Kerouac Built
I like the random brief injection of numbers, it worked pretty well. And the rhyming at the end, worked pretty well.
Oct 8, 2006 -
Re: Pillowcase Dog.
Snoik, i like how technical you explained my poem. But i'm from BC, and man it totally wasn't as exact like that. Ieatworms, i'm almost glad you didn't understand, as ...
Nov 24, 2005 -
Re: Clash/Ramones
I'd say Ramones because i've heard more. And i love their dumb rock style. But what i have heard of the Clash, they sound much more skilled musicians. and they're ...
Nov 22, 2005 -
Re: She
I don't know... The rhyming seems sloppily done. At first, you try, but then the rhyming gets increasingly more chaotic as the poem goes on. Plus, the metering seems way ...
Nov 22, 2005 -
Re: Pillowcase Dog.
Pillowcase Dog i went to your house last night and i met your dog i was lying on top of him, for quiet time until he fell out of his ...
Nov 22, 2005 -
Re: Bands you Hate
Simple Plan Coldplay Oasis
Aug 26, 2005 -
Re: Favorite Beatle Songs
All there songs to rock my socks Nowhere Man Eleanor Rigby Across The Universe Slow Down Misery Getting Better The list COULD go on forever.
Aug 26, 2005 -
Re: person above ya! part deux
^is a 14 year old boy with a knight as an avatar.
Aug 22, 2005 -
Re: In My Pants
I saw here standing there, in my pants.
Aug 22, 2005 -
Re: Battle of the Bands
Not a fan or Gwen solo, but her No Doubt stuff is pretty cool, so: Franzy Danzy vs. Bif Naked.
Aug 22, 2005
