Sgt.Pepper

I hate how you talk like a computer in your posts that aren't poetry. Like, relax. I think you lose rhythm in the third stanza, look out.

To the first person, I think that you're taking the poem too seriously. To the second person, thanks for the reply, it was inpsired by this person that I know, ...

I like the random brief injection of numbers, it worked pretty well. And the rhyming at the end, worked pretty well.

Snoik, i like how technical you explained my poem. But i'm from BC, and man it totally wasn't as exact like that. Ieatworms, i'm almost glad you didn't understand, as ...

Yeah, must agree with Firestarter. I’m killing the saxophone, infinitely-drunk vibe of the newspaper editor’s callused, discoloured self

Wow, thanks man.

One of my favorites I've read on this site. Thanks for posting.

I think that using the word "yourself" in the first 2 lines, in such a short poem is a bit repetitive. But other than that the poem wasn't bad. Keep ...

cat scratched (snake skin) eyes ^^ looks good like that... Good luck with the contest :thumb:

You guys make poetry so hard. This poem was great, read it again and see if you understand it. It does make sense.

Ha, I really liked the last line. Chanson said it was "too long". I think she was just too lazy to read it. Anyways good job. Keep on writing in ...

i liked the ending, i liked the whole poem, good job.

omg, thx chevy, that is really something to say.

thank you! I'm glad you guys liked it.

nice poem, dowg. The one liner made the poem for me. And the first line was awesum to. Keep on writing in the free world.