Sgt.Pepper

Hey, good imagery! Nice story to. Keep on writing in the free world.

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I think verses would be great to, only because you can get a better idea of what the chorus is about by it's verses. Don't like you decide if you ...

Thanks so much for the nice-o comments! very much appreciated!! Thanks again!

Yes, me too i agree with most the other people, and what they've said. The rhyming was basicly perfect. Very original ending. Keep on writing in the free world.

it doesnt matter at all, really if the first stanza is shorter, i think it's pretty good intro and it keeps the reader interested for the rest of the poem.

I think this poem was really good, except some of the repetion really brought it down, there was alot of it. But other than that it was pretty well done. ...

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Hey, really good job with this poem, it works really well. All the one liners sounded good. But in the second last line I dont think you need the work ...

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thank you for your replies. Maybe i didnt explain enough but the "pizza" line isnt sussoped to be a parody, it means my "food has no taste" which means "nothings ...

It works great. I had a lot of fun reading this poem. I don’t think that this place is natural I think you COULD turn it into "I dont think ...

yes, you already know me (as Black Dog) but this poem again was utterly amazing. You are one very great writer![/i]

I can't belive this was 1920's doesnt even sound like it??? Anyway really cool song.

Yes I also liked the last verse alot. The first one could use some working on and so could the grammar. But you sum it all up very good.