ShadeGloe

Thank you for this review.

This "Envy..." poem thing went crazy. Your poem is the truth and it sounds great!

Thank you for the feedback.

Thanks for pointing that out. I agree. Now let me go get thesaurus. Thanks again.

Thanks for the review CorruptedRoseJen. This is varying feed back. I agree about the third line. I may try Falcons suggestions bit changing that line is top on my list.

Thx falconer. I didn't even think about expanding on the poem. I'll definitely consider this suggestion.

No problem.

Thanks for the review. In all honesty I wrote this bit a year ago and thought I had cleaned it up but apparently not. I'll look into the sentences and ...

Wow. This is incredible over all. I liked the steady rhythm and the clean phrases as well as the message. The only bit that had me do a little double ...

Sorry, didn't mean to post this comment, my computer glitched.

Well, this is a prologue before the prologue pretty much and I purposely did not add dialogue or feelings to make the reader question what was happening and where the ...

Couldn't read it all. It's just too long! Sorry.