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Re: Between Two Worlds
I appreciate the criticism, and haven't been on the site in a while, so my styles changed a lot. But, Sohini, you seem like a traditionalist. This poem was never ...
Oct 16, 2007 -
Re: She Wore Red Ribbons
Thankyou both of you *winces at the word butchered* I've tried to sort it out. Is this any better?: Slender river of thine eye, Glides thy cheek with deepest sigh. ...
Jun 3, 2007 -
Re: Thought she was safe...
Please tell me if this is any better: Lying alone, pale as the moon, Thought she was safe but spoke too soon. Quivering, shivering, curled up in fear, Awaiting that ...
Mar 3, 2007 -
Re: Embers
Wow- I'm amazed if that really is your first poem. You've used excellent and unusual description- I like it a lot. Keep it coming.
Mar 2, 2007