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Good. But "as the i feel in this way" :? :? ,'the I feel'??Isn't there an extra the before I.

Yep! Second is better.

Hi Kaitlyn!! Good job!The rhyming was good.Liked it :)

LoL u've got Nate's avatar. the poem is short and sweet.(infact very short) The rhyming is good. :)

May I know whats really going on with Nate's avatar? :lol: :o :? :? :? :? Or may be I just don't wanna to know. 8)

Ok,not bad!! Why is it Farse?? :? You've a few spelling errors like: insignifigant?? inconsibable ??

My God!!! *sobs* This is truly the bestest story ever. :lol: May I ask u from what did u get the inspiration of writing such a powerful,emotional story. Man this ...

Welcome!Welcome!to yws :) Hi this is sayani. Your avatar is quite different. Its nice to meet u too. :wink:

Hey! thats an indian dress u are wearing. :)

Good job :) But the last chorus was not that impressing(mainly the last two lines, it sounded to be just a poem)

This was wonderful. I liked the following lines: “ And even when I am lost and there is nothing in this world you will give me hope. And my voice ...

I can't think of any other comment than to say good work because it is a good work. :) There are a few grammatical and spelling errors. Like u added ...

Good job! I liked the chorus part and yes of course I liked the theme too. :)

Great!!

Thanks! :) Yep!there is a bit of punctuation error(the commas),cuz I have copied exactly the thing which I wrote 1yr ago.