SilentRain

Hello :) Rain here, Grammar errors- RED Things I thing should change- BLUE Things I liked- PURPLE Other questions/comments- GREEN Could you just say “I ' m here”

Hi :) I'm Rain. I'm not really hear to tell you how to improve this, because this kind of poem needs no improvements. I am here though, to tell you ...

Hello :) I'm Rain, I like your descriptions very good, but I think you should put the picture in a spoiler, so the reader can read your poem and then ...

Hello :) I like the poem, but in some places your rhyme seems somewhat forced, and that messes up the flow. An island I built, to hold myself, A lofty ...

This is really really good. I wasn't expecting this. So much raw emotion. Its briliant! I my self believe that the best works of art come from emotional rants. My ...

Looks like this is the second review I'm doing for you today :) I really liked this I liked the structure, though it was a littlte weird to get used ...

I agree with IamHathor, I think this needs more, its kind of an introduction waiting for the story to explain it. I like the beginning of this but toward the ...

Hello! I like how you invertend your sentences in this, it makes it sound a little wierd but to people who haven't read many things written like that, if that ...

Oh Mii God!!! I love it!!! :)) I LOVE Alice In Wonderland! That may cause a little bias but oh well I find this great :) Though I did notice ...

Hello! I'm Rain, I think, despite what yourspoiler has said, that this has potentional! Its accully quite good. One problem I noticed though is that you used the same words ...

Hello, So as has been stated you need to make this longer. Of what you have written the only thing I can comment on is that the last line is ...

Hello :) I'm SilentRain, I haven't done a review in a while but I will do my best. :) To start wil, I like your title, its what made me ...

So, this is pretty good! I love the emotion behind it and the stoy of it. Though reading it, a few lines don't really sound right, and you really need ...

I like the poem a lot, but the puncuation is a little off. I Heres my review, Red- Grammar errors Blue- My suggestions Purple- Little comments :) Just a step ...

Hello! This is the first review I've done in a while so lets hope it good!! So, I like his, it is very creative in how you bring the subject ...