SimonCowellLuver

Hey, CardDragon! Ok first off I like the imginative ideas that you have put into the story. :) I think you need to do more "Show don't Tell." When I ...

Hi I think you mean Tucker [quote]But someone was talking to Talker.[/quote] The rest of the story was superb. I really enjoyed it. You really do well with "Show don't ...

I liked your poem but I agree with Ziggiefred. Even though it is a poem you still need some sort of punctuation. I also liked the topic and how you ...

Hi, I thought your poem was good. I loved the second stanza. The topic seemed very constant throughout the poem. I say this because i have read poetry and the ...

Hi I like your poem don't get me wrong. I saw that you rhymed the 2nd and 4th line which was great but I think it would be even better ...

Poem overall was great. I like the rhyme but the syllables seem off. You got good rhyming but how you did it was off because when i read it it ...

Hi, I really like the idea that you are going for. Trust me I know because i like writing about death and depression. The only issue is the one whole ...

Hello I really like what you got here and I agree with october girl on its the right section. What I seen in this is you seemed kind of scarce ...

Hi I really like your little poem about mother's day it is great. I found an error though let me show you ok. "but as you watch over you nest ...

Hey Dreamer I did it I read it and it was great. I really enjoyed the beginning making both look shy and the description in the story was amazing. Couldn't ...

I really like it. But I don't don't think you need the extra "I think" in there it seems repetitive and it gets annoying. But that is ok. I like ...

I really enjoyed reading your poem. Your rhyme scheme was excellent i like how the second and last line of the stanza rhymed it made it flow better. with fairy-tale ...

Let me start off with saying that the stucture makes it complicated to read. I am not saying i didn't like it I am saying it just makes it hard ...

Hello I am SimonCowellLuver just call me SCL. Alright not bad, not bad at all i like it. But I just didn't understand this one stanza here (posted below) please ...

Hi I am SCL how are ya! Ok I like what you got here it isn't bad at all. But I found some grammatical errors in it so let me ...