Skye

No, I didn't teach in Africa! I'm sorry, I should have clarified: we were assigned an essay, to be written in third person, about the kind of people we saw ...

Checking YWS. Technically, that's not really 5 syllables, at least the way I say it. Checking[2] Y[1] W[3] S[1] = 7, not 5. Just a thought.

That was hilarious! As soon as you get those other parts up, post them right away.

Thanks for your input everyone! It's all edited up, but I would still like some advice in regards to the last line. You were right, "drifting, glowing shadows" didn't fit, ...

Don't be afraid to share your honest opinion with me, I don't bite. ^.^ The reason it changed so quickly was because it was a freewrite - turned poem with ...

Thanks a bunch for your prompt crits you two! And I also didn't notice that rhyming in the third stanza, TBR, so I'll look over it tonight and see what ...

*glances at dates* Woah! Oops! :oops: Oh well, it doesn't make it any less good. ^,^

I like this quite a lot, quite a lot indeed! I especially loved the repetition, it suited the style nicely, and I really could not wait for the next stanza ...

I myself don't like it very much, though I do understand the feeling behind it. Judging by an above post, though, any feeling in it is accidental. So...there's not much ...

Awwww...this is very cool. I like how you compare the two, especially the car analogy, for some reason that seemed really cool. Overall, I liked this a lot, and I ...

Thank you! Yeah, I put it under Narrative by accident, but I don't know how to move it. I think only mods can. (?) So if a mod is reading ...

LMAO!

I like it too, but I also agree with convintojm. Trace? Scrawl? I don't know, but "etch" does imply the wrong thing. Overall, it was really good, and it flowed ...

I really love this, but I agree that it is a tad too long. At first, I only read half of it, skipped down to the reviews, decided it was ...

These were really good Black Rose! My favorite, though, is most definitely "Beautiful." I also liked how you have the two in one post, they really compliment each other nicely. ...