Snoink

The first stanza is wonderful in the imagery it creates. We find ourselves in the morgue along with the heroine, and it's just really creepy, which makes it THAT much ...

Hehehe... because I'm argumentive, I'm going to say that I like the "he doesn't exist" line without the "that" like Wiggy suggested because the strangeness of the lines makes it ...

Oh... the first stanza is just GORGEOUS. :) I love how it contrasts the images and characterizes the clouds. And it makes it seem like the people are meeting up ...

*puppy eyes* Can you put a translation here? :D

Oh dear... hehehe... When you do titles, you make sure that here's no frivalous punctuation in the title (thus, I took over your computer and took the period out) and ...

Aww... the last two lines are so sad! :( But I don't see the connection between the title and the actual poem. :?

You rock Lex! *sniffles*

Hehehe... the majority of SPEW members are more into the stories, save for about five. Maybe? So you haven't seen a lot of poetry critiques from us, hehe. :P Line-by-line ...

Not YWS... SEJ. Sociedad para escritores jovenes. I suppose I can help!

Hahah... this would make critiquing stories SO much easier, since you can get someone to edit the simple things...

Oh dear... silly Calvin!

Hahaha... me and Snoink are talking. That's actually kind of scary, if you think about it...

Hahaha... you haven't win yet! I'm going to change it into a mud wrestling match! *cackles*

Hahaha... no. My calculus quiz gave me the headache. You only added to it. ;)

Word has a thesaurus inside of it plus a dictionary. The dictionary is okay, but I definitely use their thesaurus a lot (although they didn't have a word for bearish... ...