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This is in Chapter 13. So you get to meet Carolina before. And it's not the same day as Chapter 6... gah. That was a bad day for all the ...

What about the friends we already have? :?

I love it when people go through my numerous sentence structure mistakes... it's just awesome. My sister is my harshest critic (or second harshest, actually) and goose pimples run down ...

*twitches* Oh, come on! I mean... I either have to novelize this or abandon it. And I prefer the former. It's part of a larger story called "FREAK." *runs away ...

Okay, a member thought it would be totally awesome to have a discussion about this, and I agreed! What makes Shakespeare totally flippin' sweet and so enduring? Discuss! :D

Not bad, not bad. It reminds me of some of the psalms. After all, it has lots of repetition. And repetition ain't necessarily bad. ;) Just remember: rhyming is not ...

I thought it was really cute and sweet, etc. I also liked your mention of the swan. I don't know about you, but swans are totally awesome and very romantic. ...

It has a perfect and complex rhythm, which is rare and quite a pleasure, but besides that it confused me and didn't touch me at all. Although I got the ...

I agree, it is a little bit bold, but I love Spirited Away, so I gobbled up every word. Mr Brice does sound American with his use of "ya'll" and ...

Just to reinterate, in case you forget and get stuck... You don't think he would rape her, which is fine, but you need to give more reasons why he wouldn't ...

This was beyond words - it was magic born in letters. I love your poetry and I can never think of anything good to say: just know I read every ...

until you only said things that made no sense (emotions echoed still in the silence). These lines sounded a little awkward... I think it's the "made no sense." It sounds ...

*sighs* Yes, you're right... as usual. ;) Hehe... I hope that in the story, it sounds less hollow since you know the context (which, as you probably noted, is extremely ...

I was going through some of my stories, and I found this piece of dialogue in one of the more recent drafts for a story I wrote. Upon rereading it, ...

Probably should be under scripts, but I'm more interested of the "romantic" aspect. Besides, I *might* novelize it anyway, so whatever. Here we go! Scene: An empty hallway, save for ...