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When I read the beginning, I thought, "Oh my God, it's a crazy psychopathic stalker lady who can't seem to let go." One of my aunts was like this, so ...

I am also a rereader. As you grow up, the same things will change for you. For example, I was reading Animal Farm again. I read it when I was ...

Watch the movie "Sunset Boulevard." They deal with the kind of scene you're talking about in a tasteful, intriguing manner. Also, be sure to take a peek at "Citizen Kane" ...

Okay... pretend you're in drama and everything, and you find a character who has one line. Yes, only one line. Is this character important? Yes. That one line will help ...

XD Awesome mushroom! I like the cheshire cat smile in the background! :D

He struck my heart, he struck my heart badly.His I don't think this line break works particularly well... glimmering eyes and sunshiney smile, the warmth you feel when he's around. ...

I like the language... I think it's Latin or Italian. Actually, it's probably Italian. But still! I like how it combines. For me, it reminds me of a cathedral, which ...

I like the first stanza a lot. Why? Because you used assonance to your advantage. What is assonance? Basically, using similar vowel sounds. In particular, you used words like "shimmer" ...

This stanza is kind of strange: I wish she would unlock herself so that I could peer into that unfortunate darkness that won’t seem to be cast away; not by ...

The rhyming is a little strange, but that may be me liking the standard ABAB format of poetry. :P One metaphor I didn't like, mostly because it bordered on ridiculousness ...

Heehee... I think the "lesson" the narrator gave the boy was a little long-winded and everything, but I especially liked the first part of the poem. As I've said before ...

It's not bad. The metering is sometimes off. That is, certain words don't seem to fit in right. For example: Sitting in a dark corner, Unable to move, The nightmare ...

My dog can swim... Besides, I know how to save a human better than a dog. All three of us would probably drown since I couldn't maneuver very well in ...

We already HAVE done it. Modern chemistry is indeed amazing. Turning Lead into Gold From Anne Marie Helmenstine, Ph.D., Is Alchemy Real? Before Chemistry was a science, there was Alchemy. ...

Okay, first of all, I want to compliment you. By using the spellchecker, it made this story THAT much better. Instead of getting held up by fighting with grammar and ...