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Second person shouldn't be used for most fiction purposes, unless you have a really good reason. I use second person in my critiques to create a more personal touch, but ...

HAHA! Er... sorry. You got away with it in the beginning, because it felt more like a prologue. But guess what, Missy? It ain't working now. What you're doing is ...

...spew also works, lol. And yeah, vomit sounds very stiff. Maybe in formal stories? I find that talking about bodily functions usually hurts the story more than it helps. :?

I guess the idea of mutations makes since because of your religeon also. And they do, his powers are that he got injected with the blood of both Oprah and ...

Don't be so cynical. ;) Every poem is different, but another one you make can be just as good.

That was seriously weird though. When I was calculating the points, I did Dusky's first, and I was like, "Holy cow, she got 8000+!" And then when I calculated yours, ...

I have my own interesting signs. I was born in the year of the dragon, my sign is a Gemini. To top it of, I turn 18 on 06/06/06, or ...

Oh. My. God. First reaction: TI-89? Did Dono convert from the dark side? *clicks link* Second reaction: Oh, my brother did a poem about... a calculator? Third reaction: Wow... this ...

I was actually a very creative kid when I was little. I would run around my backyard with my dolls or little toy pigs and then play in the gardens ...

We studied the Milgram experiment. There are some problems with it - sample/validity etc. - but the conclusions are fairly damning. You have to look at it in wider context ...

Would you kill someone if someone asked you to? This is the question that a guy named Milgram tried to figure out. After the trials of World War 2, he ...

Haha. I love taking showers, and my parents always complain that their showers are icy because of mine. Sometimes they shut off the water and stuff which makes it REALLY ...

It goes on kind of long, but it does offer some interesting images, my favorite being the square tiles. I think you're trying to symbolize a coldness... after all, tile ...

Guns beard? I have to comment on this sentence: "Its realy cheesy i know , but just imagine it was real and not fake." As a writer, you are supposed ...

It was cold and dripping. Very wet actually. "When are we going to get the new water heater?" I called out, shivering. It would figure that our house was not ...