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It reminds me of going to church. My church loves tormenting its congregation. :roll: No, but I did like it. It was just like going to church... without having to ...

This part is begging to be a prologue: The bay was only visible through a fracture of light that escaped through the billowing purple clouds, its black waters clasped the ...

I don't know. I read a lot of British work, so I am a very confused American...

This has been driving me crazy lately. The words "gray" and "grey" are both acceptable... but which one is preferred? Which one do you like better?

I said when you find a story or poem. ;) That's when you're commenting. Writing it is a completely different story.

Peridot is a gem that is light green, by the way. Hmm... closer but not there yet. And I like the adjectives... just not the order. Should I split up ...

... oh dear, I hope vulgar language is allowed for blogs. Or at least controversial stuff... :?

Help me people! I don't know if this sentence is awkward or not, and it's driving me crazy! What's wrong with it??????????? "Small peridot butterflies were woven in her blonde ...

I do like your writing. You have a very elegant style that lends itself well to poetry and storytelling. This poem has a subject that I have frequently thought about, ...

Yeah, I have to agree with Sarah. The titles given to every couple of paragraphs seemed to break up the flow... something you don't want. You have a really nice ...

LOL! Alex, it's better than the few of us who have absolutely no lives and get our kicks from how many pages for a critique we can come up with. ...

"Because I that is where I do live. " I think this sentence is a little screwy. Otherwise, interesting! A nice little thing about a place where you live (or ...

YAY! Just remember... 2.5 percent of those posts are mine. :)

Chapter 1: The Boatman The bay was only visible through a fracture of light that escaped through the billowing purple clouds, its black waters clasped the stony beach and pulled ...

I like the title. It's original and kind of fun. Just delete the (Working Title) part after it. The story also looks rather original. ...would I scare you if I ...